Hey everyone,
sorry for the delay- I just learned how to use a video app on my phone. I am posting a video of my books of two and three (I'm posting book two because I was out last week). I hope the video is ok, if not, let me know!
As much as I love your illustrations in your second book I feel like your third book very elegantly conveys your content. I feel like you will figure out your craftsmanship issues. I was very excited about spray mount the other day. The black page was a little confusing I thought it was the end but it felt unfinished and then it went on, I enjoyed that.
I agree with Beth. I really enjoyed the illustrations of the 2nd book; however, the third book was maybe better at conveying content (maybe just a personal preference?) I really enjoyed in the middle the black background with the white "organic" shaped figures. It was semi-abstracted so it just gave me something that I was able to hang on to for a bit longer to try and de-code which I appreciated. The white stars on that color of blue reminded me of flag, maybe also due to the shape - rectangle.
Hello Danielle, here are some thoughts and comments:
Glue has a lot of moisture which helps when you are dealing with fabric, but not so helpful when you are working with paper.
As to your two books, I think you are definitely working with trying to edit down a long narrative in order to create a compelling shorter version. As you might have noticed in the books below by your colleagues, some of them are literal translations, but many of your colleagues have started to use metaphor to communicate the essential content of their book.
I think you are being literal in your first book. You are still literal in the second book, but it is not burdened with the length. But maybe it has been edited too much this time!
Perhaps a happy middle ground?
As for the images on the second book, here is what I observed: heart, house: perhaps overly simplified? the person silhouette: we talked about how this is a bit awkward, especially with the shadow.
I agree with some of your fellow classmates' comments that the ending is a bit unclear. I also think the transition between where she looses everything and then how she "flies away in an airplane": it's not clear how she gets to this point.
I enjoyed the cut paper aspect of the book and especially how the bottom paper shows through. I think if you do this effect again, it would be nice to see the paper not glued all the way.
And if you want to push the "metaphor study" I'm all for it!
Hi Danielle, I was able to see your books. I liked your first book better, just because I was able to follow a story, which I had difficulty with in the 2nd book with the cut-outs. The ending was a little vague, but that sometimes is a good thing - open ending. I'm excited to see if you are trying to do something with metaphors, good luck.
This exercise, adapted from one by Linnea Johnson in the book The Practice of Poetry (edited by Robin Behn and Chase Twichell), is helpful for anyone who wants to focus on figurative language.
This will get your mindset into thinking in a non-literal way.
After you try these exercises, then try to apply it to your own project.
exercise:
Finish each phrase with whatever metaphor or simile comes immediately to mind.
To really get the most of the exercise, don't worry about coming up with something good, just write. The whole idea is to get your subconscious to make connections in a new, more creative way.
Blue paint spilled on the road like _______________.
Canceled checks in the abandoned subway car seemed _______________.
A spider under the rug is like _______________.
Graffiti on the abandoned building like _______________.
Nothing was the same, now that it was _______________.
The dice rolled out of the cup toward Veronica like _______________.
A child in _________________ is like a _______________ in _____________________.
_________________ is like muscles stretched taut over bone.
The fog plumed through gunshot holes in the car windows like _______________.
She held her life in her own hands as if it were _______________.
Lacey poured coffee down her throat as if _______________.
If I should wake before I die, _______________.
The security guard walks the lobby as if _______________.
The library books left in the rain like _______________.
ReplyDeleteHi Danielle,
I did not see any images or video. Could you try to repost it?
As much as I love your illustrations in your second book I feel like your third book very elegantly conveys your content. I feel like you will figure out your craftsmanship issues. I was very excited about spray mount the other day. The black page was a little confusing I thought it was the end but it felt unfinished and then it went on, I enjoyed that.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Beth. I really enjoyed the illustrations of the 2nd book; however, the third book was maybe better at conveying content (maybe just a personal preference?) I really enjoyed in the middle the black background with the white "organic" shaped figures. It was semi-abstracted so it just gave me something that I was able to hang on to for a bit longer to try and de-code which I appreciated. The white stars on that color of blue reminded me of flag, maybe also due to the shape - rectangle.
ReplyDeleteHello Danielle, here are some thoughts and comments:
ReplyDeleteGlue has a lot of moisture which helps when you are dealing with fabric, but not so helpful when you are working with paper.
As to your two books, I think you are definitely working with trying to edit down a long narrative in order to create a compelling shorter version. As you might have noticed in the books below by your colleagues, some of them are literal translations, but many of your colleagues have started to use metaphor to communicate the essential content of their book.
I think you are being literal in your first book. You are still literal in the second book, but it is not burdened with the length. But maybe it has been edited too much this time!
Perhaps a happy middle ground?
As for the images on the second book, here is what I observed:
heart, house: perhaps overly simplified?
the person silhouette: we talked about how this is a bit awkward, especially with the shadow.
I agree with some of your fellow classmates' comments that the ending is a bit unclear. I also think the transition between where she looses everything and then how she "flies away in an airplane": it's not clear how she gets to this point.
I enjoyed the cut paper aspect of the book and especially how the bottom paper shows through. I think if you do this effect again, it would be nice to see the paper not glued all the way.
And if you want to push the "metaphor study" I'm all for it!
I would like to push for metaphor ( I always seem to go literal), but I feel like I keep blocking myself somehow. What would be a good place to start?
ReplyDeleteCorinne, I have my video up on youtube, just look for the same title. If it doesn't work, let me know and I can email the video to you. :)
Hi Danielle, I was able to see your books. I liked your first book better, just because I was able to follow a story, which I had difficulty with in the 2nd book with the cut-outs.
DeleteThe ending was a little vague, but that sometimes is a good thing - open ending. I'm excited to see if you are trying to do something with metaphors, good luck.
Dear Danielle, I found a resource for you:
ReplyDeleteThis exercise, adapted from one by Linnea Johnson in the book The Practice of Poetry (edited by Robin Behn and Chase Twichell), is helpful for anyone who wants to focus on figurative language.
This will get your mindset into thinking in a non-literal way.
After you try these exercises, then try to apply it to your own project.
exercise:
Finish each phrase with whatever metaphor or simile comes immediately to mind.
Source: http://fictionwriting.about.com/od/writingexercises/qt/metaphorex.htm
To really get the most of the exercise, don't worry about coming up with something good, just write. The whole idea is to get your subconscious to make connections in a new, more creative way.
Blue paint spilled on the road like _______________.
Canceled checks in the abandoned subway car seemed _______________.
A spider under the rug is like _______________.
Graffiti on the abandoned building like _______________.
Nothing was the same, now that it was _______________.
The dice rolled out of the cup toward Veronica like _______________.
A child in _________________ is like a _______________ in _____________________.
_________________ is like muscles stretched taut over bone.
The fog plumed through gunshot holes in the car windows like _______________.
She held her life in her own hands as if it were _______________.
Lacey poured coffee down her throat as if _______________.
If I should wake before I die, _______________.
The security guard walks the lobby as if _______________.
The library books left in the rain like _______________.
Music in the hallway like _______________.